改词扩句
——不转变原句的意思，仅进程词汇、语法手段使句子看起来更高级、地道。下面请看例子：
例1
Others think that the utilization of waste products will be eliminated sooner or later with the emergence of hi-te . However, I did not consider that factor carefully. Because I hold the view that waste materials can be made good use of to help reduce the living cost。
原句：I did not consider that factor carefully。
改句：I fail to take that factor into careful consideration。
【解析】
在这个简略句中，重要做了两个转变，一是把"did not"改成"fail to", 同样的意思，可是词汇利用的矫捷度却夜夜进步。
二是把"consider…carefully"改成了"take sth into careful consideration"，在科场作文中，词组的应用是个亮点，而且英语中静态居多(名词用的多)，汉语中动态居多(动词用的多)，在此把动词"consider"酿成名词"consideration"，马上使英文加倍地道。
例2
原句：
You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligent in our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results。
改句：
You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results。
【解析】
我们可以看到例句中有3个简略句，咋看上去给人一种烦琐、累赘的感受。但细看之下，不难创造3个句子的主语全数是you，是以我们就该联想到同位语、插入语的利用。从改句中，我们可以创造谓语从底本的3个酿成了1个，马上使句子显得高级，精简良多。其次，还有一个修正之处为"good"，这个词是常用词，白话顶用的更频仍些，我们可以想一些同义词例如"excellent"，"outstanding"等等。
例3
原句：
In order to live a good life, it is becoming more and more important for people to learn knowledge well. Because in this modern world, knowledge is everything。
改句：
In order to live a happy(wonderful) life, it is becoming increasingly important for people to acquire knowledge well, for the reason that knowledge is everything in this modern world。
【解析】
首先我们看到原句中浮现了more and more，在四六级作文中，它可算是常客，对阅卷教员而言，不具任何吸引力，而且有落入俗套的危险哦，所以在我们把它用一个简略的副词来替代，副词润饰形容词，信任会令人感受面前一亮。
其次，我们还要重视一个搭配问题，原句中的learn knowledge是较着的中式英语，良多同学会误用，精确的搭配应当是acquire knowledge。
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